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They stood in the darkened hallway while the rain intensified outside. Their clothes dripped with moisture. Their breathing was heavy. The orange glow from the street lamp outside illuminated the droplets of water on the pane of glass above the door. Far in the distance thunder was stirring somewhere. A storm was brewing.

On the floor, a pool of water began to form creating and inpenetrable circle which pushed the two figures closer together. The silence that was all around engulfed their ears. Not a word passed between those perfect lips which quivered, glistened in the wavering light of a passing car.

A hand was swept upwards from out of the gloom, delicately brushing strands of limp hair from the others face. Searching fingertips danced across those gentle lips, pale as the moonlight which fell upon them.

Another hand met this inquisitive touch as a soft breath caught the first hand and moved it softly into a warm grasp, pressed against the beautiful flesh of a cheek.

An arm stretched through the shadows engulfing the other body in an inescapable embrace; never again to be broken.

They stood still. Lost in the moment. Drowned in memories.

From somewhere above them, music could be heard, quietly singing through the silence, carefully pushing aside the haze which had descented upon the hearts of the two people, allowing rays of sunlight to finally melt through the ice.
A contented sigh rose up to meet the lyrics swimming through the air, becoming entwined through the new, brighter song which filled both of their heads.

The first of the two dreamers laid their head on the others shoulder, their hair cascading over a thin, elegant neck. The second gently stroked the others forehead, gliding a sticky palm through jewelled beads of moisture.

Their lips met at last. A lifetime of waiting, thinking that it was never to happen. That they were never to be together. But fate had crossed their stars in the glittering pathways across the heavens.Nothing mattered to either of them anymore. They were one person now merging souls and hearts alike. The world could have ended on that very night but neither of them would have known. The constellations could have fallen from the sky taking the moon with them and that could not have spoiled the perfect bliss, the final peace that both of these lonely angels had longed for, had searched through time to find.

They dropped to the floor, locked in each others arms. They lay in the murky blackness while the tranquility of the night surrounded them both as they died in each others arms; lonely no more.
©2006-2010 ~SOPHIADEPP
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Well this has been brewing for a while. Don't quite know what it's all about but i feel there's some message here. I'm sorry to those that prefer drawings and the like but i think i've re found my love of writing. YAY. And i've got a new muse so expect more writing and poems i'm afraid. Oh and please give me some detailed but not necessarily advanced comments please. I like to know what people think.

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Sweet, yet morbid. The general idea definitely reminds me of Romeo and Juliet, especially the ending. You've got some very nice metaphors here, especially in the second to last paragraph concerning the constellations falling from the sky, and how even that would not have interupted their perfect bliss. Very nice. This piece is thick with sparse description- you've let the reader find things out about the situation, but only things that you want them to know; you've held a lot of information back, creating an intriguing atmosphere. Apart from one or two typos, there aren't any mistakes in the English, and I really don't have any major critique for this piece.

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I WILL NOT TALK RUBBISH. (Except on Wednesdays.)
Walter- Shut the fuck up, Donny.
Are the fires of hell a'glowing? Is the grisly reaper mowing?
:iconstrider-mystic:
i have no idea what to write about this, over then its brilliant

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Quam Stultus Est!
:iconstarcavity:
er...what Laura said! :D V good. who's your new muse?
:iconinvisible-shadow:
Blew me away :) Really powerful.
:icondragon-of-the-arts:
thats really beautiful. i love how we never really know who they are and yet in those short minutes we are reading you are taken through a journey of their romance. beautifully discriptive, which adds to the first kisses effect. the ending really makes you think and is sad yet people seem to crave saddness. you have created the perfect balence of love, romance and saddness that really gives you credit. it is amazing. really really well done sophie. i'm very impressed. it shows that its full of emotion which is what made it so great! i don't normally read poetry and writing on here, being a bit sinical that poetry isn't art persa, but you have completely changed my mind!!!!!!!! i really really like it!!!!!!!!! :worship:

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:iconi-love-umbrellas:
i like this very much, it is very beautiful, it's not my personal ideal but you carried the story off very well and like alex I agree that you have captured the esssence of their romance in a way that just makes you want to sigh. I'm not sure if I go for the metaphors about the stars either, but then you have again pulled this off well, I might have asked for a little more detail about their relationship perhaps, a look into what it had taken them to find each other, but it is still gripping if a little short. I still love it though, very much, and look forward to more in the same sort of mould, very much. perhaps a constructive for the future could be to develop the ideas further, not so that it's quantity over quality, but so that more of a background of the characters is developed, e.g. who they are, what they're doing together, how they met etc.

By the way I particularly love the line "The second gently stroked the others forehead"- mmmmm...sex-u-el!

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These bonds are shackle free.
Wrapped in lust and lunacy.
Tiny touch of jealousy.
These bonds are shackle free.
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I'm very glad it has the digh factor! I didn't want you to know details about anything hence why i didn't include them. I wanted it to be shrouded in mystery and for the reader to use their imagination a bit.
Thankies!

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I'm very glad it has the sigh factor! I didn't want you to know details about anything hence why i didn't include them. I wanted it to be shrouded in mystery and for the reader to use their imagination a bit.
Thankies!

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Yeah a lot of my stuff ends up having hints of Romeo and Juliet. I just love it and i'm going to see it in stratford performed by the RSC!!! YAY! Anyway, trust you to mention typos! PERFECTIONIST! Yeah i wanted the reader to think about stuff themselves, come up with their own reasons. Glad you liked it.

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